While the model is beautiful and the scene was interesting, the action was very stilted. A musical score was provided to cover the step-by-step instructions being given to the model. "Okay, walk over here. Stand like this. Walk into the pool. Now, walk back out. Show off your legs..." I think it would have been better all around if time had been taken to block the scene beforehand and help her look more natural. It also would have been better to use actual shampoo and have her work it up in a lather rather than using shaving which has to be really worked in because of its stiffness. Finally, you had an entire 15 minutes to play with. Instead of rushing it, try teasing the audience.